Nice even transition from the previous chapter to this one. Jazz's personality/character shines in his inner thoughts to himself. You write this soft humor beautifully. As in previous chapters the pace/flow of the words was well done allowing this scene/scenes to move nicely without feeling to rushed. You did great.
Pleased to see more in this 'verse. Your creative/imagination shines i this world you have created and seeing a more in depth look is wonderful.
I think when something catches Jazz's attention, those involved will be swept away - for good or bad, so it is probably best to catch Jazz's attention in a good way. Poor Prowl won't have a chance (so to speak).
Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to more as you are able.
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Date: 2011-04-01 04:33 am (UTC)Pleased to see more in this 'verse. Your creative/imagination shines i this world you have created and seeing a more in depth look is wonderful.
I think when something catches Jazz's attention, those involved will be swept away - for good or bad, so it is probably best to catch Jazz's attention in a good way. Poor Prowl won't have a chance (so to speak).
Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to more as you are able.